if I hadn't been lurking in ff I would not have seen this update, I'd try letting readers know you updated, or else this might be on the second page in a week. I enjoyed the update saw a few minor errors that could be easily fixed. Though they are getting more frequent I'd try spellcheck or reading over it twice before pressing post. I really enjoy this, though I feel the story is being rushed. I look forward to the next update, keep up the good work Neon.
Shannon 17 Her parents became rich by winning the lottery, but live in this tiny town to help the people. She has a twin sister named Stacy and the two cannot stand each other, because they are of opposite personality. Helpful, caring of others, sociable, friendly, bubbly, gullible, naïve and brave. (We needed a happy character )
Oh, this is defiantly intriguing, a different type of murder story. Hopefully, by the end it won't go all sappy but so far it's wonderfully cynical. As suggested spell check can be the best thing! Just to fix up a few errors but also re-read and make sure the word you want is the word typed. Nice story again~