Update!! I ran after her and she zig-zagged making it hard to follow. I tried my best but it wasn't enough I had to stop her. "ANGI! STOP!!" "No! YOU KILLED HIM!!!" "HE WAS GONNA KILL YOU!!!" She didn't reply and instead I heard a crack and a scream. I ran toward the sounds and I saw her hanging on a ledge above a huge hole. I tried to pick her up but snow was making me slip. I tried again and I got her up just before I fell again. We laid there in the snow for awhile and it started to get very cold. I gave her my jacket and she took it. I told her to go get help and she asked "Why?" I replied with showing her a bullet wound in my leg. She nodded showing a tear going down her face. I smiled as she ran away. I knew what would come and it seemed...peaceful to finally have peace instead of all this chaos. Oh man!!!
Use punctuation. Description. When Using dialogues, use quotation marks. Try putting it in paragraph form. And don't hate on Adam. He was being honest. I agree with him too.
Final Update I sat there in the cold pitch black night breathing heavily. I tried to cover myself but all I had was pants and a T-Shirt. I began to shiver and my lips were turning blue. "Angi? Babe? Anyone?" I knew it was hopeless to call out because no one would come. I sat there with tears in my eyes pleading for someone to come. I laid there for what seemed like hours then my vision went black. I knew I was dead but then again how could i know? I began to panic because I didn't feel dead. I couldn't feel anything not even my heart on its rapid beat. Then I saw something...a gleam of light. But how? This couldn't be if I was dead. (blurry) "troy....troyyy....TROY!!!" I woke to the sight of Angi and Emily. I smiled but then it faded away when I saw a doctor enter the room with a bad look on his face. I started to think of what was going to happen. Doctor: "Son...you are one lucky son of a gun you know that? You are not dead but..." He sighed then patted my shoulder. "You will never be able to walk again I'm sorry." Emily and Angi burst out crying. I just laid there stunned. It then hit me and I cried too. I could now see all my friends I got into this. Karl was dead and Tate and Nick god knows where they are. I didn't hate Adam I just didn't like the way he saw the world in his own eyes, I guess that was his downfall. I started to cry thinking of my life as a cripple. But all I could do is try to look for a bright future when I have one dark past. HOPED YOU GUYS LIKED IT THANK YOU ALL MY READERS I APPRECIATE THE SUPPORT!!
Let me rephrase that. I meant to use the word said, because in some part you just put: Karl: "something". And description lol. And I'm not a troll.
He doesn't have to put the word said as long as people know who's speaking, it's his style of writing.