Revenge Of The Cold Hearted

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by -PA_Veronica-, Aug 23, 2012.

  1. Had writers block but I'm back
     
  2. It's awesome
     
  3. Awe thanks Maria
     
  4. UPDATE
    Chelsea is back with her vampire skills and crazy hot crush.
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    I pushed my feet off the ground and jumped in midair. I felt the cool air touching my skin as I flipped backwards dodging Dylan's blows. He threw a second punch and I whipped back my blonde curls a blur. He launched at me and we fell to the ground.

    His fast breathing told me he was almost out of breathe. I smirked oh yea Chels 1 Dylan 0.

    He laughed breathing on my face "Looks like someone's been practicing pretty well," he moved his hands up my body.

    I flipped him over "Yes I have thanks for noticing," I laid on top of him looking into his beautiful eyes.

    "wow your absolutely gorgeous," he smiled.

    I blushed furiously and flipped off of him and into a cart wheel landing in a spilt. "yup still got my cheer leading skills," I look around the cold room. Getting up i examine the room, it was dim the only light coming from a tiny window with a limited amount of sun shine. The walls were plastered with a cherry like color making my stomach flipped.

    "You hungry? We could grab a delicious snack," he looked at me worried. "you haven't fed since you turned."

    "yes I have I've been drinking animal blood ill just grab a deer or something."

    "you know what I mean Chels you haven't fed properly," he takes my hand in his, his cool touch sending electricity through me. He smiled "Come on hot stuff ill show you that it's not that bad," he pulls me out of the training room and Into the open sun.
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    "Mmmmm this is good," I drink more sucking the human dry.

    "See it's totally okay," he smiles his dazzling smile, showing off his fangs.

    I throw the lifeless human aside my thirst growing "I want more," I look over to a little girl not far down the street playing hop scotch. I lick my lips and run towards her.

    Dylan grabs my arms taking me into a tight bear hug "No Chels, eating a pathetic rapist is one thing but an innocent little girl?" He tries to calm me down.

    "Let me go!" I snarl. I feel the need to rip that little girls heart out and suck her dry. I go weak and fall to the floor going into total darkness.
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    What you think? Good? Great? Boring?leave feedback
     
  5. Maybe tomorrow I'm too tired to even think
     
  6. 0.0 you should update 
     
  7. First on page 6 
     
  8. Later today
     
  9. This is real good  keep up the good work 
    Haha I have read some of your old stories, lol if ya remember me  I had the username 'ritaaaa'  haha oh well
     
  10. OMG update
    Tell me what u think
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    I opened my eyes groaning. "Where the hell am I?" I look around and realize that I'm in Dylan's bed. I look over at Dylan an blush furiously, he's asleep with only briefs on. I tip toe out of the room and into the bathroom, looking at my reflection. My blonde hair was a mess and I was wearing a silk night gown. I blush harder, did he dress me?

    I wash my face and slip back into the room gathering my clothes. I feel a hand on my waist and I turn to see Dylan holding me by my waist.

    "Morning beautiful," he smiles.

    "Um what the fuck are you doing?" I flip him onto the floor my face bright red.

    He laughs getting up. "Baby don't you remember last night? Girl you were amazing haven't had vampire sex before but man you were good."

    "That did not happen! I don't remember that! Did we-" I get dizzy sitting on the bed. "Oh my god."

    He sits beside me laughing harder "I'm joking hot stuff. That didn't happen I'm just messing with you." He frowns "Is it that bad to think that we had sex?"

    I giggle "duh I mean I would never go for a guy like you," I smirk getting up. I walk to the bathroom and change into my clothes. "Well I should go thanks for everything."

    "Yea sure but-" his cell phone rings and he walks over to answer it. I watch his amazing body almost drooling. "Yea Jack ill call Chels and tell her." He scratches his head yawning. "Alright," he hangs up and walks over.

    "What's up?"

    "Jack called and he wants us to come over i guess we got a mission," he spanks me. "I gotta change so you gotta leave baby," he bites his lip.

    I slap him. "Ugh your disgusting ill be at jacks and leave your horny side here please," I roll my eyes and walk to my car. I giggle silently to myself "disgusting perv."
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    I get to jacks house and unlock the door walking into his living room. "Jack I'm-" I walk in to find Dylan and jack already sitting down making plans.

    "There she is I called her and told her to hurry." Dylan smiles at me winking. "Girls just take forever to get dressed."

    I roll my eyes "morning jack, go to hell Dylan."

    Jack laughs "you guys make a great team now come on Chels and join us."

    Dylan pats the seat beside him "Come on darling sit here,"

    I scoff and try to sit as far away from him as I can. Jack eyes Dylan making sure he keeps his hands to himself.

    "So anyways as Jack and I were just saying before we were Intruppted. The mobsters have a partner and we need to find out who that is. Word is that the head mobster is going to Vegas this week. That means this is our chance,"
    He looks at me with a smirk. "Pack your bags baby were going to Vegas.

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    Oh snap they going to Vegas alone for the weekI smell trouble.
     
  11. Awesome story but hard to follow
     
  12. Omg it's amazing!!!!!
     
  13. UPDATE!!!!!!
     
  14. Yea sorry I just realized that of u mean with the dialogue I totally agree and thanks maria