The Box

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *Tormentor_person (01), Sep 17, 2012.

  1. Yes I am awesome thank you
     
  2. Haha I know but that is my terribly short story lol
     
  3. Starting!!! 
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    Looking into a mirror in her bathroom, Zoey Wilson realised that her normally bright blue eyes had started to get duller. She thought to herself Its probably just the cold weather and lack of sun... It does it with hair too doesnt it?... . Zoey just ignored it and went onto brushing her lovely long blonde wavy hair. She got called goldielocks because of the golden shade to her hair. On her way she checked her mobile and seen the time and also seen that she had a text message from her boyfriend Alex Sands but put her phone back into her pocket and made a dash for the door whilest shouting goodbye to her parents and heads to the bus stop.

    Once she arrived at the school bus stop she checked her phone for the message. It read "Hey, i have a supprise for you, babe!" As she got on the bus she scanned the seats for Alex. Once Zoey sat down she put her phone away and was excited to know the supprise...
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    Whats the supprise? 
    Go on have a guess. Jar Of Dirt, you know so no spoiling 
     
  4. Lol, you two are hilarious.
     
  5. Are we now, kiri? 
     
  6. La la la so what happens?
     
  7. Le Waiting et Le finding out et Le reading. 
    This has been brought to you by my failure at french© 
     
  8. Abby will keep up the suspense 
     
  9. Awesome start!! Remember to proofread; there's a few spelling mistakes. Bump!!
     
  10. Exactly... Besides its Jar Of Dirts turn to update 
     
  11. Second updste coming soon guys :D
     
  12. Update* -.- Jesus christ almighty mary /).-) So many mistakes... 
     
  13. My turn

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    "Alex Sands! If u do not get out of bed right this second I will come up there and drag you out myself!" Alex groaned as he turned over in bed refusing to open his eyes and accept that he had to get up. He slowly opened on eye and checked the time on his alarm clock, and almost fell out of bed in surprise. God I'm going to be so late! He thought as he scrambled into the bathroom hastily checking his phone to see if his girlfriend Zoey had replied yet, still no reply but that's ok he thought as he shoved a slice of toast in his mouth pulling his school bag over his shoulder hurrying out the door without so much as a goodbye to his mother.

    He stopped dead realising he'd forgotten the surprise he'd promised Zoey! He sprinted home flinging open the door and charging up to his room where he kneeled down and pulled out a small box from under the bed. It wasn't a big box, big enough so that it could be held in one hand and wrapped with a dark blue ribbon. Gripping the box tightly he jumped down the stairs two at a time only to be stopped by his mother.
    "Mum! I'm gonna be late!" said Alex
    "You aren't going anywhere until u give me a hug" she said sternly holding out her arms for a hug. Alex hugged her quickly sighing to himself, and left, sprinting to the bus stop, only just catching the bus before it left.

    Sliding the box into his pocket he stepped up onto the school bus and searched the bus for Zoey, seeing that she wasn't there yet he sat down in a spare seat and laid his head against the window watching the world as the bus made its journey to school. Hearing the doors open he looked up and saw Zoey's beautiful face entering the bus, "Hey Goldilocks" Alex called "Over here!"
     
  14. Round of applaus 
     
  15. Ill read big paragraphs later 0.0 when you guys sleep and i dont have homework
     
  16. Haha okay  Big paras would probs be jar Of Dirts area... And he said im a good writer! YOURE BETTERER! >:{D
     
  17. Not bad guys  Keep going
     
  18. Fanks Kiri 