Haha Dante you already are! Lol! Anyways here is the long awaited update! I stare at him in horror. "S-s-s-Seth?!" I manage to croak my voice, slightly cracking. "Sophie it has been so long." his slick voice caresses my face, moving down into my heart with a lightly skip and hop. "you." I clear my throat and say louder; knowing people are out of school by now. "YOU! YOU MONSTER! DESTROYER! YOU KILLED MY LIFE! THREW MY ON A SHELF THEN BOOM! IM OFF IT TOSSED AROUND SLAMMED ON THE FLOOR! YOU ABUSED ME! USED ME!... And ... And all for money." I slide down to my knees it felt so good to finally scream that out at him, it felt so good to finally cry about it. To finally weep out my hate and sorrow. FLASH BACK I walk down the halls laughing with one of my friends, not looking where I am going my Domo hat low on my face. I then collide in with someone making me fall to the ground. "OW!" I say loudly enough for the few people in the hall to hear. "DANMIT! MY ARM! OH GOD!" I hear feet running away from me, and strong arms lifting me up. Then all goes black. FLASH BACK OVER! and this is where I leave you guys wondering what happens next. Have a great day/night!
I found some mistakes but they were not. Story killing mistakes like 1: I slide on my knees. You could've put I slid or I fell. 2: You have a lot of words that shouldn't be there. But still a good story I'm trying to find my name. Just kidding
A few mistakes here and there, I can't really see the plot yet but I'm hoping it's a good story. Maybe you should edit it before posting. Also a thing I noticed from some of your chapters, I don't know if it's for effect or anything but there are many short sentences, if it's not for effect you could probably combine them together? .-. The story will flow better.