Lovely Betrayal

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by -iEmiHaveHimTrippinForDays, Nov 3, 2012.

  1. I can take criticism but if yur gonna say my story is annoying then dont comment or read it
     
  2. *Facebrick*

    Are you saying that you'd take it into account only if I liked your story?
     
  3. no..... but look i see yur point and ill take yur advice but my story isnt annoying T.T
     
  4. It just started T.T.... I know its different from wat i wrote before.... so its not that good i know
     
  5. Then you'll have to realize that not everyone is going like your story. I, for one find it annoying. Deal with it.
     
  6. Ok no need to be rude.... And if yu dont like it then why did yu read it and comment.... Just stay off my post and thats it.....
     
  7. It's great I wish I was in it lol
     
  8. maria yu will be later on k
     
  9. Can I be in it?
     
  10. 0.0 pm me ^_^ but yeahh' i needed more characters thanks
     
  11.  UPDATE!
     
  12. Ill write one last update and thats it k
     
  13. Only one 
     
  14. Yes ill write again tomorrow though
     
  15. I love it. Just lile the last one suspensful. Update please
     
  16. one last update for tonight k
     
  17. My last update for the night! I'll update again tomorrow...
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    The final bell had wrang. I walked to my locker and saw that Veronica was at hers. I ran over and hugged her tight. She began to Laugh.

    "V!! What happened?" I asked

    "I only got yelled at for fighting and after school clean up." She responded

    "Yay! i thought something worse was gonna happen" I said

    "Haha nope. But Ashleen has to work with me after school next week cuz this week the school admins are busy with the SAT stuff for the juniors." She told me

    "Oh thats true" I replied

    Me and Veronica kept talking. Veronica looked like she was in a trance. I waved my hands past her eyes but it didnt work. I turned and saw my brother there.

    "V HELLO!?" I yelled trying to get her attention

    "Wha... What?" She looked so lost. She blushed closed her locker and ran off to her car. I laughed and walked to my brother Bader's car and looked over to where Karl was park and there she was. Ashleen all over him. He was helping her clean off the blood. I got in the car and Bader drove home.

    He walked inside to talking on the phone with his girlfriend. I sighed. Sometimes i wish he would notice when i need him to talk to. I started walking up the drive way when i heard someone call my name.

    "Hey Emily!" I heard. I turned around and saw that it was Ashleen's brother Chris. He was walking his dog Duncan with his girlfriend Callie.

    "Oh. Hey Chris Hey Callie" I said

    "Hey Hun!" Callie said

    "Hey Em. How- Whats wrong." Chris asked

    "Nothing im fine." I told him

    "Then whats with the puffy eyes?" He asked again

    Ugh! He noticed I was crying. I fixed my glasses and switched my bag to my other shoulder.

    "Oh its nothing really. Im fine.Well I have alot of studying today. It was nice seeing you guys." I said and walked off

    I didnt wanna talk about what had happened to day. I walked inside and saw that Bader was staring at me in confusion.

    "Hey you o-" He began to say

    "IM FINE!" I cut him off and ran to my room.

    I tossed my bag in a corner and laid on my bed. I cried a little. Then Karl text me. I opened the msg.

    "Hey Babe I can't come over today Im sorry. I promised Ashleen i'll help her with her pre-cal and chemistry homework."

    I just stared at the msg. I threw my phone at the wall in fustration. I heard my mom come up the stairs. I hurried and locked my door.

    "Honey you ok?" She asked

    "Im fine." I told her

    "Well your dad is coming over on Saturday to pick you up for the weekend." She told me

    "Ok" I said

    I heard her walk away. I just wanted this day to end already. I laid on my bed and moments later I was asleep.
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    Hope yu guys like this update