Love Lives

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *Meiqing (01), Aug 13, 2012.

  1. Reread everything to fix spelling mistakes and other things.
     
  2. Meiqing's pov
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    I come back from the back with a new smoothie for the guy and a mop to clean up the mess. I see Allie cleaning up so I go to help out. Afterwards I help her get the smoothie out of her and returns the guys money for the smoothie since I spilled it on him.
    Jake's pov
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    I see the girl from before come back with a new smoothie in one hand and a mop in the other. Turns out the two girls are friends. They both help each other out and I'm just loving both of them.
     
  3. Allie seems like u need grammar help
     
  4. Remember to put dialogue in and make it longer!! As Sky would say, DETAILS DETAILS DETAILS!!
     
  5. Wait! Who? Allie? Or me?
     
  6. I like details but it's longer to read but I don't care about that as long as it is something readable
     
  7. Allie where's ur nxt part. I'm afraid of saying something that's diff from urs
     
  8. Oops lol hehe well
     
  9. Ok thanks for the advice!!
     
  10. You're welcome:) I'm sure you'll get a lot better!
     
  11. Yea hopefully but this seriously is a lot fun I've nvr done this b4 either
     
  12. Meiqing's pov
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    After that whole mess I went on break and we all sat down at a nearby table and chatted for a bit. Allie and Jake told me how they met and I was glad that she had a friend at her new school. But I could tell she liked him by the way she talked and looked at him.....

    Jake's pov
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    I'm so glad Meiqing wa able to get a break then because we were then all able to talk. Allie and Meiqing were telling me about themselves and their long close friendship. It then made me realize that I would have to choose who I wanted to really like.....
     
  13. Sry I didn't find any good plc to put dialogue...
     
  14. Donde esta Allie?!?!
     
  15. When you said "Allie and Jake told me how they met" you can write what they were saying.

    And again, DETAILS! :)
     
  16. I'm sry I've spent a long time out of school. 2 months to be precise
     
  17. So have I… but I write every day so I'm not out of practice 
     
  18. Do u seriously write everyday? Sounds like a friend of mine who signed up so this essay thing. She's gotta write an essay every week then turn it in. Ugh I'd hate to do that