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Here is an update! Hope y'all like it! Cara's POV First Date I was so scared! I did not want to disappoint Josh. I was so scared I didn't know what to wear. I put the cutest clothes on. "How do I look?" I asked Zara. "Fine, if he liked you when you first came here, which he did, then he'll like you however you look," she told me. "Right." I sighed. I am finally a Level 7, which ment more outside privileges. We were going to a pizza place called "Pizza Inn." I heard a knocking on the door. "Dammit! I haven't done my make up yet!" I ran over to my make up. "Stall him, please!" "Hey, Josh, how are ya?" I heard Zara say as she opened the door. I put on my make up as fast as I could. "Hey, Zara. Where is Cara? Is she ready?" he replied. "Almost, just needs to put on make up." I was almost finished. Just lipstick and eyeliner. "She looks beautiful without make up," I heard him say. "Here that, Cara?" "Yeah, yeah!" I finally finished, still looking pretty good considering I hurried. "Sorry," I walked up to the door. "Ready?" I asked. "Ready. Are you?" he asked. "Now I am. Bye Cammy, bye Zara!" I walked out the door hand in hand with Josh. "So, you seem pretty nervous," he told me. "Well, yeah. It's our first date. Not counting the summer dance." "You shouldn't be. It's just a dinner date, then a movie," "A movie too? Alright." I really didn't care. With Josh at a movie was heaven! As we were about to head out we had to put on our "bracelets" that tracked us. Finally we headed outside and went to one of the cars the hell gave us to use. "After you," he said as he opened the passenger door. I slid in and he closed the door. Then he slid into the driver's seat and started the car. We drove in silence for the whole way to the pizza place. It wasn't awkward though. It was peaceful. We arrived at the pizza place. I was about to get out when he ran out and opened the door for me. I smiled and got out. Then he opened the door to the pizza place. We walked in and waited for our waiter or waitress. Suddenly a woman about our age was in front of us saying, "Hi, welcome to Pizza Inn. I am Holly, your waitress tonight! Please follow me." She directed us to a booth. We sat down and ordered our drinks. The waitress, Holly, was flirting. Suggesting drinks, pizzas, deserts. He told her he just wanted a drink and she left to go get it. I frowned. "Something wrong?" Josh asked. "No, nothing," I replied. The waitress came back and sat Josh's drink down. Then suddenly mine was all over me! "What the-!" I shrieked. "Cara, are you okay?!" Josh asked. "I am so sorry," Holly said, not very sincerely. "I'm fine, I'm just going to go clean up," I excused myself and went to the bathroom. I had soda all over my shirt and my jeans. "Witch," I mumbled. I tried to clean it out but it didn't work. So I just dried off and went back to our booth. "Are you okay, Cara? That waitress was a witch with a capital W," he said. That made me feel a bit better, knowing he felt the same way about that waitress. "I'm fine, just another cute outfit ruined," I replied. "Hell, that sucks, it's so adorable! I'll buy you a new and even cuter outfit. I promise," he told me. "Thank you, Josh." "I am extremely sorry!" Holly the waitress interrupted. "Your meal is free since I spilled soda on that beautiful outfit!" "Thanks, Holly," Josh said. "Your welcome, hun," she replied. When she walked away, I laughed. "What is it? What's so funny?" Josh asked. "Oh, you can't tell, can you?" "Tell what?" "She is flirting! It's easy to tell." "Was she?" "Yes!" "Thank you, I thought she was being overly nice." "Overly nice my-" "Here is your pizzas and a new soda for you, miss," Holly interrupted. "Thank you," we said and started eating. We talked and laughed. Finally, we finished eating. "Ready to go?" Josh asked. We got up and we left, ready for the movie. "What do ya want to see?" Josh asked as we were driving to the theater. "Um... I have been wanting to see one movie, but you might not want to see it," I replied. "What is it?" "'The Hunger Games.'" "Really? I've been wanting to see that too! 'Hunger Games' it is!" We went into the theater and bought our tickets, popcorn and drinks. We went into the section and the trailers were already playing. The movie was amazing. I cried and laughed and jumped like crazy! We left after the end credits. "That was an awesome movie!" Josh said, obviously ecstatic. "I know! And the part where Rue died, broke my heart!" I replied. "I could tell," Josh smirked. He put his arm around my waist. He leaned in finally! And then... "Hey, Cara, who is..."
Here he is! Update time! Freddie's POV Seeing Cara I was walking around the parking lot at the movie theater. Then I saw my ex-girlfriend, Cara. So I went to go say hi. "Hey, Cara, who is..." Cara was with some guy and he was about to kiss her. "Oh! Freddie! Hi!" She backed away from the guy. "Babe, who is this?" he wrapped his arm around her waist and pulled Cara close. "Josh, this is my ex, Freddie. Freddie this is my boyfriend, Josh," she introduced. Josh nodded. "Hello, Freddie," Josh greeted. "Nice to meet you." "Nice to meet you too, Josh. So what were you two doing here?" "We just got finished watching a movie, 'The Hunger Games.'" Cara smiled a bit. "Oh, I was just going to watch it. Weren't we going to go see that when we were together?" "Uh, yeah, uh we got to go, curfew," Cara said and pulled Josh away. "Curfew? We don't have a curfew," Josh questioned Cara. "Just, come on!" Cara pulled Josh to their car. What a strange meeting. I went and bought the tickets. Though, I couldn't stop thinking about Josh and Cara being together instead of Cara and me. I think I miss her... Josh's POV The Ex "Curfew? We don't have a curfew," I told her as she dragged me to the car. "I know, but anything to get away from my ex!" she replied. "How long were you two together?" I was just being curious. "About a year. A few days before our anniversary I went haywire and we thought it was best it we went our separate ways," she answered. "That's nice. But it was kinda awkward right? I mean seeing him again. 'Cause it was for me." "Yeah. It's so weird seeing him on the outside, you know?" "Yeah, I guess." I started the car and started driving out of there. "You know what sucks the most about that meeting?" she asked after a while. "What?" I asked even though I think I knew the answer to that question. "We never got to kiss. That's the second time now!" "Second? What do you mean? This was our first almost kiss," I said. "That night after the dance. I knew you wanted to but you didn't." "I'm that obvious?" I asked. "Yeah! It's so easy to tell!" she replied. "Well, Rob was right. I need to learn how to hide my emotions better." She laughed and we went the rest of the way in silence. As we went back inside, the staff took our trackers off. I decided to walk her to her dorm. "I had a great night, Josh. Thank you," Cara smiled as she said this. "Your welcome, Cara," I replied. I started leaning in. She leaned up against the wall and I smiled. Then finally my lips were on hers. I felt a spark, wait, no, fireworks go off inside my head. My lips stayed on hers for a few seconds. When I finally pulled back, she seemed as starstruck as I did. "Good night, Cara," I whispered, as if out of breath. "Good night, Josh," she replied and opened the door to her dorm. I walked off, smiling to myself. When I finally got to my dorm, I just stood there for a few seconds. Then I opened the door to be bombarded with questions. I just nodded or shook my head. I couldn't speak, the kiss had blown my mind. "Dude, are you okay? Did you have a scream fest or something?" Rob asked. "No, I finally kissed Cara," I whispered. "What was it like?!" Rob asked, eager as Kate or Hayley. "Fireworks." "Oh, that's it? I expected something bigger... Wait, you did say a spark, right?" "No, I said it was like fireworks going off inside my head." Rob was speechless at that. I just got ready for bed and lied down. I lied there for what felt like hours. I couldn't believe it. That kiss was meant to be, I could tell. I wonder what Cara felt... Cara's POV The Kiss Electricity went through my body. Fireworks went off in my head. I felt like I was on fire. When he pulled back I could still feel the electricity, the fireworks, the fire. "Good night, Cara," Josh whispered in awe. "Good night, Josh," I whispered breathlessly. I walked to my door and opened it. I forgot about my roommates, my outfit covered in soda, and my voice. I couldn't hear Zara or Cammy ask their questions. I just changed, brushed my teeth and went to bed. "Hello?!" I heard. "Cara? Are you alive or the walking dead?!" "I'm alive. Just speechless," I said. I could still feel his lips on mine. "Well, are you going to answer Cammy's and mine questions?" That must have been Zara. "What questions?" I asked. And I was serious. "Hell, woman! What has gotten into you?" I heard a different voice. Cammy. "I am just amazed right now..." Suddenly I felt the fireworks, electericity, the fire, and the kiss fade. "About what?!" Zara again. It started leaving faster. "Girl, are you going to answer or are you just plain deaf?" Cammy. It vanished from me. I sighed, "Could you have been a bit louder? That amazing moment wasn't ruined fast enought!" "What are you talking about?!" Zara asked. "He finally kissed me and I was trying to keep the moment for as long as I could!" I exclaimed. "Did he?! Shut up! Tell us, how was it?!" Cammy. "Fireworks went off in my head, electricity was running through my body, and fire was pouring through me! It was amazing!" "Seriously? That never happens when Marty and I kiss..." Zara frowned. "Seriously." "Well, that's amazing, I guess..." Cammy sighed. "Yeah, well, I'm going to sleep. Night." "Night." Cammy and Zara said. I slowly drifted off to sleep with one question in my head: What was Josh feeling when we kissed? I guess I would never know... ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Aww! Who is thinking, "Finally!" and who thinks Freddie is jealous? Later we will have another new character. Actually two new characters!