Alright. Give me a couple of days to write like enough for 6-10 updates. Then I will tell you all about the frenzy when it is ready!
Yeah, just like I said in the story, mother, father and brother. My character is Sadie who is mentioned in the first or second update.
Hey, girl! I don't appreciate you stealin' my words. J/K. I wuv you, ditch! I can't wait for the frenzy!
Here it is! Zara's POV So we got two newbies. Lucy and Ivy, they have MPD, Multiple Personality Disorder. They seem like they will be fun. But summer is over and winter is coming. So no fun yet. It's November so it's really cold! Only six months until spring! I have been watching Cara and Josh lately. They are too... Lovey around everyone. It just sucks. I mean, it's great for them that they are dating, it is. But it's just bumming me because Marty and I are nothing like that. But we are younger. And we don't have a lot of time together since neither of us can drive. I have been watching Rob and Cammy. When are they going to get together?! They are older than me, yes, but seriously, I have been hearing Cammy talk about Rob all the time lately. And Josh is hearing Rob talk about Cammy a lot too. I swear, I need to get them together. And fast. Lucy's POV So, I have made friends with many different people. They seem to like me. But when I tell them about my disorder they seem to distance themselves from me. Though, my group doesn't. And Josh and Cara are so adorable! It's like Seras and Alucard! Anyway, there is this one girl, Natalie, she is so shy and she has... Problems. I met her and tried to talk to her but she said, "Go away, I don't want to talk." So I walked away. I asked Ivy to go talk to her, but she was so shy she wouldn't. I think Nat and Ivy would be such good friends. Ivy's POV "No, Lucy," I said. I hated to talk to people I don't know. "Please! You two are shy and and you both don't like to talk!" Lucy argued. She was talking about Natalie, one of the new girls. And she was in our dorm. "Fine! If it will get you to shut up," I growled. "Yay!" she squealed and pushed me in Nat's direction. "Hi," I whispered shyly. "Hi, uh, Ivy, right?" she asked. "Right, uh, Natalie." "Call me Nat," she said. She started speaking up. "Okay. So, uh, Nat, how have you liked this place so far?" "It's hell, ya know. Especially since I can't see my boyfriend," she said sadly. "Is that why you haven't wanted to talk?" I asked. She nodded, "Him and I just started dating the night when I killed the guy that got me here." "Oh, that sucks," I said. "So anyway, do you want join us over there?" "Sure," she said. She actually smiled. For the first time, she smiled. I think I was going to like this girl. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Feedback is kindly accepted! And bump this, please!
I don't want to sound pushy or mean, but you said you wanted feedback, so here it is: I think the whole love thing between josh and cara is getting old. It was cute and fun to read at first, but this is a completely different story than it turned out to be. I love getting the new charecter's, and I think you should keep doing what you are doing with them, but I think you should try to keep the focus on cara and her struggles and her friends, instead of her love life. It's just a thought, and you don't have to take my thoughts or my critasism. Please don't think I'm being mean! I just want to put my ideas out there.
I love it that you have your opinion and that made me think. And after the frenzy I will make it more on her struggles and whatnot. Thanks.
Nat's POV So I went to court. And I was found guilty. But I went to a place like a rehab. Before I left, Kyle told me, "I'll write and visit and call as much as I can. Ill wait for you, Nat. Remember, I love you." "I love you too, Kyle!" I yelled the last word as I was pulled back and away from him. And now I am here. In a place like hell. I made a new friend. Her name is Ivy. And I have joined her group. With the famous couple Cara and Josh. "Us, famous? Please!" Cara said. Thought they were. They both killed their families. Mothers, fathers, and siblings. Perfect for each other and famous. And Christmas break was coming around. Which meant time with Kyle! Cara's POV Christmas Break So it's about a week before Christmas and everyone gets to go see their families. But Josh, a new girl, Raychel, and I don't have a guardian to go with. So we are staying here. Josh and I decided to walk around the school area of the place. We went to the band room and it was so quiet! And then I saw it. "No way!" I squealed. "What, babe?" Josh asked. "A guitar!" I ran over to it. "Do you play?" He walked over. "Yeah! I love to play! I have played since I was little! Like eight!" I tuned the guitar. "Play something. Like a song you know." He sat down in front of me. "Okay, I sing a little too, ya know." "Then sing and play, babe! I am dying to hear you!" "Alright!" I started playing my favorite song, "Eyes Open" by Taylor Swift. From the Hunger Games soundtrack. I started singing, "Everybody's waiting, everybody's watching. Even when you're sleeping, keep your ey-yes open..." And I kept singing until the end of the song which was about four minutes long. I smiled shyly when I was finished. Then Josh started clapping. "That was amazing! I loved it, Cara!" "Really?" "Yes, really!" He got up and hugged me. He picked me up and twirled me around and I giggled. "Do you miss you family?" he asked as he put me down. I shrugged, "I don't know... I loved my family but I also hated them." "I do." He sighed. "We were supposed to be a happy, normal family. But I just killed my family for no reason. I just got angry because they loved my little sister more." "Oh, that is so sad..." I whispered. "I killed them because they abused me. They hit me just to set me straight. It never worked. I shouldn't have killed them." I felt a tear trickle down my cheek. "Let's go back to the lobby," he said and whipped my tear away. "This place is kinda creeping me out." I laughed, suddenly in a better mood. "Sure, let's go." I took his hand as he led me out. I looked back at the guitar before we left the room. So we just sat on the couch in the lobby watching television alone. It was nice and peaceful, not having many people around. I wished this break would never end. Josh's POV Cara is amazing guitar player and singer. I just can't believe she can sing and play the guitar. It's amazing. And she spilt her story out. And so did I. It was the first time I talked about it to anyone. It was like a weight being lifted off my shoulders. I bet she felt that way too. So we went back to the lobby to watch T.V. I just watched the T.V., thinking about what to get Cara for Christmas. I was thinking a guitar. As if she was reading my mind Cara asked, "What do you want for Christmas?" I thought about it for a minute. Then I said, "Well, whatever as long as it's from you." "Hmm..." She leaned her head on my shoulder, watching the tv. "Ya know what?" I said after a few minutes. "I want a notebook, for my plays." "You write plays?" she asked and pulled back where she could see me. I nodded. "Yeah, my recent one is with us and all our friends." "That is so cool. You never hear of play writers anymore." "Wanna come see them?" I asked. I was nervous. No one read my plays. "Sure," she said getting up. "Let's go." I got up and took her hand. Then I led her through the halls to my dorm. It took a while, not as long as it would take to get to her dorm. "Home sweet home," I said as I opened the door. "For now." She walked in first to find my stuff. Then she saw the closet with my clothes and she walked over to the desk near it. It was neat, for once. All my papers stacked up. The papers for school in one of the cubbies. Papers that I doodled on in another. And the plays in a different one. And lastly, stories and poems I wrote. She looked for the plays and took the first page from the top. I let her read it as I tidied the place up even though it was clean anyway. I remade my bed and picked up dirty clothes, like my mother used to. Finally, when she was done reading that one page she put it up and walked over to me. "Your play is amazing," she told me. "Thanks," I replied with a smile. I heard a knocking on the door. I walked over and opened it. It was Dom. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Uh, oh! What do you think is about to happen?
General POV Dom just stood there with a blank expression on her face. Josh blushed with embarrassment. He knew he wasn't supposed to let Cara in. Even then was not an exception, he thought. "Dominique, let me explain," Josh started. "Save it, Josh. It's fine. Since its the holidays and no one is here but you and a few others, I'll let it slide," she said plainly. "But it's just during the holidays. Remember that." She nodded at Cara and walked away. "That was close," Josh said as he closed his door. "Yeah, thankfully it was Dominique and not someone else. They might have not let it slide," Cara sighed relieved. "Yeah, so what do you want to do know?" Josh asked. Cara shrugged. "I guess get out of here." "Where to?" Josh asked. "Anywhere but here," she took his hand and walked out of the room. They were both thinking about what they were getting each other for Christmas. Nat's POV I walked up to my home. I had just gotten out of my brother's car. "They have really missed you," Mark said on the way there. "So have I. And, of course, Kyle." I just nodded, staring out the window. Now I was standing at my front door. I was nervous. What if they judge me? What if they don't talk to me? What if they hate me? What if- "Go inside, sis," Mark said. He smiled at me. He was such a great big brother. So I opened the door. It was dark at first. Then the light snapped on and I heard, "Welcome home, Natalie!" I blinked in surprise. I saw all my classmates there. My mom, dad, and most importantly, Kyle. "What the..." I began. "Nat, it's a surprise party, for you!" Kyle said as he ran up to me. He hugged me and spun me around. I giggled as he put me down. "But why is everyone here? From school, I mean," I asked surprised. "They all are your friends. They may not show it, but they are. They missed you so much. And they really wanted to see you again so they came here to the party I planned," Kyle answered, smiling stupidly. I grinned stupidly. "You did this? For me?" He nodded. So I kissed him. "Thank you," I whispered as I pulled back. "Your welcome! Now come in! It's freezing outside!" He had a point. It was December in Missouri. So I walked in and everyone greeted me with "Welcome home" or "I am so glad to see you" or "You look great for what you've through!" "Nat!" I heard. I looked over and saw a popular girl. It was Amanda. The most popular girl ever! "Oh my god! I am so glad you are okay!" She hugged me and smiled at me. It was creepy. "Uh, thanks..." I said. This was weird. "So you wanna go shopping with my friends and I? We are going to go get our boyfriends their presents for Christmas!" "Uh... I guess..." I was so shocked. She was asking ME to go shopping with HER. This was unreal. "Great! We are going to the mall tomorrow at noon. See ya there!" She walked off and waved. "See?" I heard behind me and I jumped. "Christ! Kyle! Don't do that!" I slapped his arm a few times. "Now, what?" "See? People like you!" he said. I just nodded and took his hand. "So, what do you want for Christmas?" I asked him. "I already have it. But I would like to go the "Three Day's Grace" concert coming up in the summer," he answered. "Anything else?" "Just seeing you on Christmas will make me happy," he smiled. "Alright." Where was I going to find those concert tickets?