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>:L I was in a story!!
Let it die
Jack: -toys with wooden stake-
It's always "no reason" isn't it?
*not
No bad
(I forgot to say in my goodbye, blade smells like stinky poo poo )
Jack: -chuckles and places wooden stake back in coat pocket-
Jack: -sits on sidewalk toying with wooden stake-
Other then that, not bad
Don't just use the word "say" when somebody speaks. Use "exclaimed" or "explained." And don't say "I say" use "said" past tense is key
"Oh my god did you here the news?" "No, what's going on?" "Jack SexyBeast Ricky is leaving FF!" Yes it's true! I am leaving, mostly. With the...
Jack: -coughs-
Jack: -hands it to her- do your thing
Jack: what?
Jack: fine, I'll go put it behind a tree or something -starts to walk away-
Jack: -turns to Corry- you want this? Not like it really cares about who takes care of it.
Jack: -angrily mumbles- she has to stop making these things. -reaches to pick up the hell hound-
Jack: -snorts- I'm not fixing your lipstick. You just became a big girl about an hour ago. Anyway, I'm sure your busy with your bright red...
Jack: -laughs at her- nice job princess, you just smeared it even more