Separate names with a comma.
(who is Alex dating?)
Tree: you better not have sex with that boy
Drake: bad Hercules! Bad!
(it's a special type of salvia the dog produces when needed otherwise it is just normal saliva)
Drake: *blushes* sorry *quickly walks to my cabin*
Drake: bad Hercules! Hercules: *whimpers and goes and licks tom's knee which heals on contact with the dogs salvia* (by the way Hercules'...
Fine I'll critique I love how it is based in las Vegas and is about a murderer thus the character being more or an antagonist then a protagonist...
Hercules: *bit tom's knee that was in the air*
Tree: grrrrr I'll posses you later
Hercules: *bit the other leg while the leg he tried to bite was in the air then ran off*
Tree: YOU LIKE DRAKE GET THAT THROUGH YOUR HEAD!
Hercules (drake's dog): *bites tom's leg then runs off and stands by drake before Tom can react*
Tree: NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! THATS THE WRONG ONE...
(he walked off before Alex got a blade to his throat) Drake: *puts his sword away*
Drake: then I suggest not saying that again *walks off quickly*
Drake: do you plan on saying that again?
(he was talking to Tom )
Tree: *thinks to tom* but I'm tired right now I'm napping *falls asleep*
(talking to Tom)
Drake: *blushes deeper* say that again and I will cut that pretty little face of yours *takes out my sword* and if you think I can't remember I've...