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Bump!!!!!!
Angela: *changes to human form* uh oh… heh… sorry to bother you…
Angela: *sees Amanda and slowly backs away*
Angela: *follows rabbit to the winter hideout*
Angela: *changes to tiger form and hunts a rabbit*
Angela: *changes back to human form* I need a new tree…
Angela: *branch breaks* No!! *falls to ground*
Angela: *climbs a tree in tiger form*
(okay: Name: Angela Willow Age: 17 Looks: [img] Personality: Smart, clever, athletic, outgoing, very defensive of her friends Type:...
(Can I join or not?)
(Is it too late to join?)
This is the prologue I added ~<>~<>~<>~<>~<>~<>~<>~<>~<>~ Monica slammed her fist on the desk. "ANNIE!" She bellowed to her apprentice. "I...
Well this is pretty much dead anyways
You should try to not talk to the reader as much, and use shorter sentences in some parts to build suspense. Other than that, it's really good
Wow this is amazing!!!!
Bump!
-_- well I'm sorry to disappoint you
Bump
it's really good
Bump!!