Separate names with a comma.
Angela: -watches Sammi train-
Kira: -sighs- If you'll excuse me, I need to go save my sanity. -walks to the back of the cave and starts meditating-
Sammi: -throws knives at a tree-
Put end punctuation after dialogue and check for spelling errors. You have good detail, though. Nice job.
Kira: I know what it feels like. Horrible things. Angela: Okay then… -walks away-
-__- F***
Angela: Are you… heartbroken?
Angela: Is there something wrong with your heart?
I know how to say… duck with an f in French…
Yeah it's hard to type how it's pronounced, but that's close enough…
Angela: Are you okay now?
And apparently it's hard to do direct translations but that's roughly what it means.
Well… 1.) When you say it you need to have this Chinese accent which I don't have so when I say it, it sounds stupid 2.) I don't know how to...
Kira: -sits next to him-
Angela: -thumps her back trying to get her to breathe- Sammi: -to Puddle- Blake did this, didn't he?
Tell you what…?
Kira: Me too… Angela: Are you okay? Amanda!
Bump
Angela: -comes over and uses her healing powers to try to save Amanda-
So my friend went around calling people horse bucket. And they were really confused…