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-I relax from her touch opening my eyes to look into hers. Pain and love can be seen in them-
-I speak even tho it's painful. My voice still sounds broken- "...I was....going to get...your phone....I was...giving you time....to get...
-I lay back closing my eyes from the pain. I take Alida's hand with my uninjured one finding comfort in her touch-
(don't look at me she kidnapped it!)
-I try and sit up but stop as I cough up blood-
-I grit my teeth as the pain hits me. I speak in a broken voice- "No..."
-I gasp and become conscious again-
-The nurse nods and back out of the room.-
-I lay silently and still. A nurse comes into the room- Nurse: "He has a pretty bad gash in his chest, one on his forehead, 3 broken ribs, a...
(If its something like that I would. Like lying to keep Alida knowing about a surprise party or gift or something those are good lies)
-The doctors finish doing all they can do. My heart rate is a little better. They walk out and leave me in the room. I remain unconscious-
(I'm proud that I don't lie.)
(I'm serious. I don't lie )
-They rush me into a room and start hooking ivs up to me and put a pacemaker on me. My heartbeats are short and shallow. They start patching up...
(actually getting the phone was my intention . No joke. I was giving to time to get control of yourself)
-I remain unconscious on the way to the hospital. I had intended to go buy her phone and come back to pick her up after that to surprise her. Now...
(I've seen a lot that are )
-The ambulance speeds off to the hospital. The reporter speaks one more time before going off the air- Reporter: "I don't know who this Alida is...
-I slip into consciousness for a moment finding the reporter standing over me. I mutter a word before slipping back into unconsciousness.-...
-A news person comes and reports live on the scene showing the wrecked car and me being loaded onto a stretched- Reporter: "I'm here on the scene...