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(it's just a pet peeve of mine when someone barges into a scene)
-I take a deep breath and softly blow up into the sky. A small steady stream of fire shooting from my mouth- "Guess again..."
(It might help to make friends if you pick people that aren't in the middle of something Sammie. I don't mean to be blunt but it's true)
-I slow down to a walk and slowly walk around the tree. I kneel down next to her- "Your not a monster..."
-I follow quickly catching up to her easily-
(I've never been silenced )
(I hate pervs )
my work is complete. She doesn't know she's beautiful but she is
-I step closer- "I would..."
-I easily climb up onto the roof still staring at her in wonder- "That was amazing..."
No you aren't you are the most beautiful girl in the world to me
-I stand up and slowly approach Alida-
-I see a flash of magic and look up to see Alida sitting at a window. I look in amazement as I see her dragon half-
-I flare the magic up and circle it around me in beautiful flourishes-
-I sit quietly playing with some magic in my hand-
(I agree with Pie! None of us are blind Alida. We all think your beautiful.)
-I sit down on a bench in the courtyard-
(Don't call her pretty. Call her beautiful
(I third it )
-I blush from the warmness and smile watching her go- "Count on it."