Separate names with a comma.
Luna: -walks around- Vivian: -walks around- Cyprus: -walks around-
Sammi 20 House slave [img] A gun that shoots lasers and a light saber Distant, doesn't usually talk to people, will fiercely defend anyone she...
Sammi: -walks around- Jake: -hides-
Sammi: -walks around-
Sammi: -sits under a tree- Cameron: -walks to the river- (Wait to be accepted before you join)
Jake: -watches for Annabelle-
(Sammi 18 [img] Crew member Unfriendly, distant, fiercely protects anyone on the ship Gun and sword Her parents were pirates so she had no choice...
(Can I join?)
Jake: -still hiding-
What she said. Bump!!
Sammi: -walks around- Cameron: -walks around-
Jake: -whimpers softly-
BUMP!!
YAAAAAAYYYYYYY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :D
Jake: -frightened- Sammi: Bye -walks away-
Sammi: Well, then I would choose you Jake: -cowers in the barrel-
Bump!!
Sammi: Neither. I'll keep hiding Jake: -nervously watches for Annabelle through a little hole in the barrel-
Jake: -turns into a mouse and hides inside the barrel, frightened-
I have some things: 1. Use LOTS of detail. Make the reader be able to vividly picture the scene in their head. 2. Use paragraphs and double space...