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Okay, so I think your story is alright so far, I just have a few pointers. 1.) Use LOTS of detail. Describe everything that's happening; make the...
UPDATEEEE
AMAZING STORY. ^.^
<3333 RITAAAAA I LOVE IT!!
Remember to put punctuation after your dialogue, and use LOTS of detail. ^.^ Bump!
OHMIGOSH SHE'S PREGNANT
TLKKKKYeah I know I know late post
NOOOOOO ANDIIIIIIIIIIII YOU CAN'T LEAVEIM CRYING FOR REALSIES RIGHT NOW
Seems interesting. Continue, please.
UPDATE GIRLIE!!
Just because your rp died doesn't mean you have to make another one. .-. There's too many rps already.
Idk. I think fyre?
Ohmigosh this is INCREDIBLE!
YOU BETTER UPDATE SOON OR I'LL CRY
Talking about the first page.
Yeah, that part's annoying. Bump!!
We need to do something ._.
AMAZING. BUMP!!!
This does seem interesting, but I think you should wait. There's too many rps already, and we don't need another.