Separate names with a comma.
This. Is. Amazing.
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Wonderful. ^^^She has good advice; you should listen to it, and have some variation on the length of your sentences so it flows better, but...
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ACCEPTTTTT. This is so exciting!!! :D I'm finally a part of this!
This is- I'm gonna- Seriously- I can't- GAHHHHHHHHHHH. I LOVE IT. Van Orcellooooooooooo
Great story. If I had to add some criticism, I would say add some short sentences. Not too many, because then it's choppy; just a few so it's more...
I love it.
Sky, sweetie. No one could ever hate you. ^.^ This is beautiful, as always.
I'll miss you, Sophia.
This sounds really interesting. ^.^ I probably won't write anything, but I can't wait to see where this goes.
This is amazing.
Incredible.
Found it on page 90-something.
Here you go.
AMAZING. I love it. I have a friend named Madeline.
Wow. Okay. I've been gone for a while, but I still love this story. (:
AMAAAAAAZING
Great story! Remember to proofread; there's a few spelling mistakes you didn't catch. ^.^ Bump!
For your dialogue~Use punctuation after it, capitalize the first letter, and start a new paragraph when a new person is speaking. Also, don't...