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Yo mama so stupid when she was told she broke the law, she offered to fix it
^.^ I promise I'll have an update in time for 2013.
SHE SHOULD MURDER THEM. SHE SHOULD MURDER THEM ALL. DIEEEEEEEEEE
I can't believe I missed so many updates IM STILL HERE.
HAPPY BIRTHDAY. I love the story.
Wonderful. I just have one thing to say. You don't need to put a comma right after the dialogue. Put a comma in place of a period when the phrase...
Amazing.Be careful with your tenses; occasionally, you accidentally write in present tense. Bump!
Good job. I would recommend slowing down, and taking your time to build suspense. Also, try to add more detail (What she's wearing, what the...
ELI?? Is that you? I love it <333
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Immune. That makes sense. If you say, "I put a curse on you", and the other person says "immune", then they deny the curse. It's implied. Notice...
You shouldn't make the thread here. Instead, you should've posted on all of the old members' walls, and maybe a message on campus.
The last one made me cry. You really should update your other stories.
I love this. It's amazing.
Thanks everyone I'll save the doggy! But the Santa? Eh. ~<>~<>~<>~<>~<>~<>~<>~<>~<>~<>~ ~Terrence~ It's been nearly a year, but it still...
I would recommend not switching POVs that fast, and like the others said, slow down. Let the suspense build. Add more detail. ^.^ But I still love...
:3 Update. Again.
You better not.
It's alright. I love this.