Separate names with a comma.
Oopsforgot the other hand.
He would love Erica. FLUB
I would just be like, no thanks. I'm not into having "FUN" when there's a parasite outbreak.
Remember to make a new paragraph for each new speaker. Buhhhmpppp
※〜※〜※ How to kill Adam? An hour later, after the pain had passed and I healed, I walked down the hospital corridor deep in thought. He was much...
Bump.
AWWW.
You'd better.
I agree with poppet. :3 For dialogue, make a new paragraph each time a new person starts speaking. The first letter of dialogue should be...
Seriously? Did their sheets and pillow and floor get all wet because of it? Did you have to clean it all up? That's the downside to pranks....
I WANNA SEE THEM. WHY WOULD YOU EVER MAKE US WAIT FOR THEM?? YOU'RE KILLING ME, MAN.
Poor girl. :/
Remember punctuation and capitalizing names. I would suggest adding a bit more description, too. It seems a tad rushed. Also, this seems a...
I think this is a really interesting concept, so if you do add it, please don't center the story on romance. It might be better to have romance as...
I love this. The description and mystery… I can be a second editor if you want. :3 I'm really obsessive compulsive, especially about...
Yes, please do the Grammys flashback. (:
Maaaan. D: Thought she finally updated.
What are you rani??? And btw I'll edit if you want. :3
Aw. (: Her brother is sweet.
I'm intrigued. :3 Buhmp!