Separate names with a comma.
I DON'T KNOW BUT THIS IS A CRUEL AND UNUSUAL PUNISHMENT I DONT EVEN KNOW WHAT WE DID WRONG -keeps crying-
?No thanks. I don't need that kinda description… See, this is why Bloodlust was so good.
:3 You switched tenses, misspelled 'something', and that comma should be a period.
Or live fast, die young, and leave a pile of bones. That's what happens when you get eaten!
ELI IS SO CRUEL -keeps crying on Rhy-
Maaaaan. I'm going to die too young.
"I'm Serephine," she replies politely. "And I didn't know it either, until I saw someone from my year wandering around the building."
Um… the beginning? 0.o
Serephine looks at her. "Yes," she replies with a smile. "I'm dead, too."
'MURICA
Whoa. Intensity. BUMP!!!
Serephine peeks into a room and sees Isabella and Jason. Finally, another ghost, she thinks. "Hello."
Eyes and lips… [img]
Both of those are eyes…
I get distracted really easily. Before, I spent half an hour looking at pictures of dip-dyed hair instead of reviewing stuff.
I'm still only on the first one.
Serephine floats slowly down the hallway. She can't find Amy, and she needs to talk with someone who can see her or she'll lose her mind.
If you want it reviewed, then yes, you should ask me. :3 and you'll be added to the Q. I'm going to call it that now.
I'm writing reviews right now! Jeez woman it takes time
You can go in front of jennette's story because she didn't get permission. Sorry I wish you could cut more, but that wouldn't be fair.