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Interesting. The plot doesn't seem all that original so far, so maybe you can add your own twist, and there are a few technical mistakes...
Okay, I actually read it. Sounds interesting; there just might not be enough people to participate.
That cyan >.>
Disney World sucks. Disneyland is so much better.
Whoa dere.
A few spelling/grammar mistakes, but this idea is very interesting. I'm intrigued.I like this; I'll be reading!
The barcodes crack me up.
You really need to quit. Playing PimD for three years? That's a lot.
Perhaps you could write a story that has a different plot. There are tons of stories/movies/shows that already have this storyline, so you don't...
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0.0 I have no idea who he is…
Oh and bad plotted roleplays, too.
What has ff come to?
Also, the plot doesn't seem very original so far. Maybe add a twist or something to make it more unique/interesting.
Here are some suggestions to improve your writing: Use paragraphsAdd detailSlow down the story -- it's moving very fast -- and add suspenseTry to...
I love you (but not in a creepy way)
10 because Leo is cool, as his username states.
I kinda feel like calling your avi Obama is offensive. Just my opinion -- I know he's been insulted in way worse ways, but I just don't like when...
The leaderboard cracks me up.