Separate names with a comma.
Endure instead of endore Cries instead of crys Lying instead of laying They're small mistakes, not that noticeable. I just spotted them because...
Rawr
Bye.
Death and mayhem yay~
Alright. I'll be reading.
Awww they're so cute!
Oops random quotation mark. But that's cool.
I like this. Just be careful with spelling mistakes -- proofreading helps a lot.
That's good. Love the description.
Bump!
Same, marshmallow. Same
Gaze* bleh. I was doing the quote from memory.
Royale, that was a very confusing sentence. But yes, I agree with him. For example: "…gazed up at me with the blue eyes she had" could be...
Oops sorry. I'm crap at answering pm's. And I can't wait for your story.
Love it! Great job.
Hurry up and choose a winner
Sorry not sorry. A lot of things are wrong with my, but not my cheese hating. It's nasty, man.
I love the title.
It's nasty. I peel the cheese off my pizza. And scrape it off my chicken parm.
Cheese is disgusting.