Separate names with a comma.
*cause then you know people are reading Omg I just made lots of mistakes
You should love getting criticism cays then you know that people are reason your work and wants you to keep going and get better at writing.
Annabeth:no I do it's just if I tell you then he will uh kill me.
Annabeth:no I can't.
Annabeth:uhm there's uh someone that uhm... -voice trails off-
Lily:yea,I don't understand why he went all crazy yesterday thou.
Annabeth:fine but uh I need to uh tell you something but I don't know how.
Lily:yea, I think most people is like that.
Annabeth:it doesn't mess with me.
Lily:yea hm it's fun to think about which side she will take... I bet it's vampire she's already talking about sucking Tristan's blood.
Annabeth:nothing's wrong, and cause I want to -takes the drink back-
Annabeth:-walks towards the pub and starts drinking- Ava:-walking aroun the castle- Lily:-walkin around in the streets-
Lily:oh, I wonder what side she will pick.
Annabeth:-turns around and walks away-
Lily:what?
Lily:cause she's goin to be more powerful than me cause she's half vampire and half witch, and I'm just the leader of the witches!
Annabeth:-looks at him and her face pale- uh uhm... I uh like the uh necklace....
Lily:-says slowly- what I did... Oh crap, this isn't good.
Annabeth:percyous!! I need to tell you something!!
Lily:noticed what?