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Jess: What kinda trouble? -Raises eyebrow, smirks then laughs-
Jess: Oh...Okay? -Looks at her curiously-
Jess: Um I don't know -Changes the subject quickly- So um, how come your around here?
Lily: There should be a healer round here or something, I'm not great at magic but I think a spell could fix it Jess: -Trips slightly but stays on...
Lily: -Rolls her eyes- You -Sighs slightly in relief- Guess not though...-Still looks uncertain- You okay?
Lily: -Hears Kyle and frowns. Jogs over and sees him. Eyes widen and stares at him- T-tree monster? 0.0
Jess: -Walks pas Arcadia- Lily: -Yawns and rests her head on the deer-
Jess: -Bares her fangs at an annoyingly loud bird- Lily: -Carrys on patting the deer-
Jess: -Walks into the forest, looking around to pick up the sent of things- Lily: -Ties a flower to the deer's horn and smiles widely- (I'm...
Lily: -Finally reaches the deer and pats it's head- Jess:-Sighs realizing she should hunt soon-
(Oh okay..Sounds wierd, I'd rather not knowq
Jess: -Hums- Lily: -Runs after a deer trying to stroke it, hyper of eating apples- (Subject? O_o )
Jess: -Sits under a tree- Lily: -Skipping around- ^.^ Hi creatures! -Waves at a bird-
Jess: -Pounces on a deer- Lily: -Lazes in the sunlight under a tree-
Jess: -Hunting- Lily: -Wonders what to do, still walking around-
he's back! :D I randomy started laughing and now everyone thinks I'm wierd though...-. XDoh well. Wb dittle.
Jess/Lily: -Walking through the woods-
CACDBE. XD
Good comeback. .-. Noob. (@Shadow.)
It's good, just remember to describe things and include how the character would feel etc. Proof read as there are some mistakes but overall it's...