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(Wait are we having the battle!!!!? Yay)
Snow:-looks up- who are you?
(What no battle darn oh I know I'll make a character that has no background and is just pure evil and we can fight her lol)
Snow:-sits down in the cave in shock- Claran:-instantly at snows side- what did he do to you! Snow: nothing
(Oh I'm sure it'll be fine)
Claran: she has it well probably not anymore but she did and that's why he took her -growls- I will kill him if she gets hurt
Claran:-flys to aaron- Aaron! He took her, he took snow!
Snow:-looks up tilting my head- Me? I don't think I'm different from most humans looks down-
Claran: well snow wasn't! takes back into the air and blows hot fire at you before leaving in search of snow-
Claran: then why were you there huh! You just fought with someone who ended up taking my rider!! -growls glaring at you-
Claran: I was speaking dragon -starts talking in english- he should understand another dragon -still fumong with flames coming out-
Claran:-stops and growls low- do you know where he took her?!
I like it but I'd use spacing or something and keep working you can only get better with practice
Claran:-flys out and lands in front of kain- where did the lightning dragon go! He took snow! I will rip him to sh reads if it kills me if there's...
Snow:-frowns- your not a monster its just -looks away- you do terrible thingsand make grave mistakes but that doesn't make you a monster -looks...
Update I think its getting good make sure to explain things and use details
Snow:- lets go of you and looks around- your life?
Snow:holds on to you getting transported as well I don't care if it doesn't work I don't want it to but its Aarons! Now yours Claran:-growls in...
(Oops need to refresh lol) Snow:-screams trying to get loose- let me go! Clartan:-struggling to get back up-
Snow:-stares looking around for a way to escape and looks back- please claran go Claran: snow no Snow:puts the gantlet on and steps back to...