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Drake: *looks Zac over again* what is his rank my queen?
Drake: *stands up and looks Zac over* and who is this knight my queen?
Drake: I shall do whatever my queen asks of me for I live to serve my queen
Drake: *smiles slightly* and now I ask for a quest so I may further assist my majesty
Drake: I was captured by the enemy my majesty and I fought my way out it took a very long time and I was wounded severely I was forced to stop and...
(*bows)
Drake: *gets on 1 knee and boss my head* I wish to have a quest my queen
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Drake: *follows not speaking*
Drake: *follows her*
Thanks Jeni and actually I just enjoy Shakespeare
Drake: well where is she?
Drake: can I get a quest or something from her I'm pretty bored
Drake: thanks *looks at the approaching woman*
Shade: *deepens the kiss*
Drake: *smiles* alright
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Drake: *turns around surprised and says* you realize your 12 and I'm 21 right?
(then scratch that) Shade: *kisses Sam's cheek* goodbye Sam
Drake: *looks for someone to give me something to do*