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Jess: -Looks around having a quick check for the rum place- Jake: -Looks at the man tied up in a corner creeped out-
(I killed of Renee, so making him: Name: Jake Age: 15 Looks: Long black hair in a sorta scene style, Hazel eyes, tall Personality: Secretive, shy,...
Jess: -Walks to the kitchen- No one better have drunk my rum..
Can I get an idea on how to improve it please?
When did they brake up though? D:
(what are you on about?)
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(1st person this time) I woke as the cheap pills wore off.Where am I, I thought groggily as I looked around. It seemed I was in a small...
Jess: sure -smiles and goes back to her cabin-
(cya) Jess: Let's check -Starts walking again-
Jess: -Searches round the ship and shakes her head- I don't get where it is..
(bye)
Jess: -Walking- It didn't take him too long so let's check near the kitchen
Jess: -laughs and stands up and slowly begins to walk round the ship-
Jess: -Nods- I'll ask later...Wanna go search for the hidden rum place? -laughs-
Jess: Are we meant to be going somewhere? Like an island? -Gazes at sea-
Jess: You'd have to ask captain but I think he got took as a prisoner
Renee: -Jumps into the water to go swimming but gets eaten by a shark- (didn't like her xD)
Jess: -Laughs- Yeah!