Separate names with a comma.
Jess: -Looks at it fascinated- It's beautiful...weird language though -Laughs lightly reading the strange letters-
Jess: -Smiles- Thanks -Looks at the bow affectionately- It was crafted by my father -Face falls for a moment but puts on a fake smile-
Jess: It's ok-Looks up and picks up her bow and nods- Yep, you're Henry?
Jess: -Yawns and puts away her bow and walks back to her home-
(.-. You guys said you would take it to Pm...Oh well, just let this die.It was a lot less active lately anyway.)
Oh I forgot, this is to make the rest make sense but may be explained in the story. There was a house built on the remains of the burnt jail.
I'm sorry but this is awful.I don't mean to be offensive but there's no plot, that is not how a depressed person would act,it's short, barely ant...
(can I join?)
Jess: -Sighs and gives up then walks back towards everyone-
Jess: -Laughs and fires a few more arrows-
Jess: Wow, cool job! -Grins and sends an arrow hitting the dummy straight in the heart-
Jess: -Gets her bow and arrow out then nods and smiles- Yeah, do you?
Jess: -Follows- Cool, mine's Jess
Jess: Oh.. -Stops backing away and smiles- Thanks, can I practice on one please... -Looks up hopefully-
Jess: -Sighs but reaches for his hand and stands up- Uh...s-Sorry about th-that -backs away scared hoping he won't report or attack her-
Jess: -Walks towards the exit not hungry-
Jess: -Looks at him scared and confused then try's to run away with the dummy but falls under it's weight-
Jess: -Sneaks into the training academy and tries to steal a dummy to train off-
Jess: -Looks around the room curiously-
YupThe rest/ most parts of the story will be nicer though. It won't be a too long story as I'm doing it for an English assessment.