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Janae -reads over the lines- Till ever lasting death.. -closes the book, tiny tears in her eyes-
Alida -peeks in at him, making clear judgements of him in her head, smiles slightly-
Alida Ok ok fine.. -crosses arms with a smile-
Who*
Alida -looks at her in shock- Already getting busy on the bed?! Wow sis! Get some! -laughs loudly-
you were worried I'd take offense to that!? That wasn't even critic, that was a tip
it's an ok start. I wish for more details on maybe we the characters are. And one spelling error I think. Other then that it's very suspenseful....
Yes I do
Alida -smiles at her amused- Well I guess you could have done worse! I'm happy for you! (awe but harsh critics help my work, just in a hurtful...
If you would like me to check out any of your stories post the name of your story on my wall Warning: I'll be completely honest when I read...
(check out my story The Ring Of Fire I'd like some harsh criticism)
Alida -raises a brow in slight disappointment- A commoner?
Janae -sits in the garden lonely, looks down at her book of "Romeo and Juliet"-
CHARACTERS NEEDED Name Age ersonality pperance Good/Evil
Alida -eyes widen- YOU? in love?! -laughs until she cries- With who? -smirks-
Alida -plays with her necklace- Janae -walks to Alida's castle, playing with the flowers in her hair-
Alida -sits on her throne, singing to herself- Jacob -playing with his sword- Janae -picking flowers in the meadow-
Jacob -leaning against a tree-
Ice!!
Love is a burning thing.. And it makes a fire-y ring. Bound by wild desire. I fell into a ring of fire. I fell into a burning ring of fire, I...