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Bump
Lexi; - grabs some food off the counter and sits outside on a bench -
Bump! But try using words like 'Shouted or Mumbled' instead of 'Says' all the time
Lexi; - smiles - lets go then! - turns around and starts to walk -
Lexi; - sighs - yeah, guess so. Do you wanna, grab a bite to eat or something? - smiles -
Update
Lexi; Ha, yeah. - rubs my hip -
Omg! BUMP!
Lexi; getting a bit of fresh air - laughs again - on the floor.. - smiles -
Lexi; so what you doing? - laughs -
Lexi; - sees Kaitlyn - Umm.. Hey.
I agree. Try using a bit more dialogue and that's it. Great story so far! Bump
( Nick what are you on about?)
Lexi; umm.. Yeah. Uh, fine thanks. - smiles -
Bump!
Lexi; - gets up and dusts myself off - Thanks. - looks at grey -
Bump!
Lexi; - slips off the branch - owch!
Lexi; - sees grey- hey! - smiles and waves from the tree -
( I am here))