Separate names with a comma.
Elza; Fine. Good luck finding your dragon. - waves wand and Celia appears -
Elza; so if its your secret, how come its not yours to tell?
Bump! •Try to use paragraphs. •Try to not go to fast, explain what it is like and what happens in each place that you go.
Elza; so who's is the secret that you can't tell me? - stares at Cade-
Lexi; ok then. - puts cold flannel on his head - I will leave you alone for a bit. - leaves room and slowly closes door behind me and walks into...
Elza; so you work for someone? - tilts head -
, guys this isn't about problems now. It's about the story, if he hasn't had sleep for 3 days he hasn't and he shouldn't really be doing this....
Elza; which are?
Lexi; - looks around - Killua! Are you ok?
Elza; - falls asleep on the roof -
Elza; so you didn't want to stop the fire.
Skrillex; Please, follow or walk someone who has already made a story and ask them for some tips.. Then you can make a fresh story or carry on...
She does have a point..
My advice; • Follow someone who has already made a story to give you some tips. •Go to sleep. •Plan your story. •Think about grammar and...
By the way, I'm not being mean here. •Maybe try writing it when you are in a better state then. Instead of trying to write a story after all...
, uumm.. I would agree with Adam but I would put it in a less harsh way.. It is a bit inappropriate to be honest with you, not a fantastic way to...
Elza; you cod of got some by the nearby lake?? - points to the lake -
( it was a mistake)
Elza; how?