Separate names with a comma.
My father is... Hephaestus!
*hides in the shark tank*
I'm actually immune to sharks. *kicks the air until she kicks Jaz in the soft spot* EWWWWWWW!
Jaz ----------------- "R..R.. Rory.." I whispered, my voice barely audible. "Julie, JULIE!" He was shaking with sweat, tears, blood.. No. This...
Ehem. What do you think it is?
And you guys don't even try to guess what the corpse's name was
You messed up a little
I already killed you! *pushes Jaz off a cliff*
._. Dominic kinda freaks me out
Alex
I started looking through this and... Wait- why is this in FF?
Says the noob. They get hundreds of applications each day, it can even take months.
Idk I meen idc I suck at being a noob
*shoots Jaz* Muhaha
Try to add punctuation through the dialogue. Like, "I don't know, I just don't know." "But the dog, he's sick,"
:geek: But I may get very nerdy sometimes ;)
There's a twist coming on *sings* ---------------------- Grunt. That's what I mostly do now. Meet D. She's my best friend.. now. And what I mean...
=) Well, let's see... 1) Add a little more detail. You can never have enough 2) Try to separate your story from your note. Like this. But I...