Separate names with a comma.
Ponyo: *runs out of the fire wiping deer juice from my head and nods saying quietly* please *i quickly look around for my tiny pack and grabs it...
Ponyo: *sits up my head poking out above the flames and I croak* food?
Ponyo: *in the middle of the camp fire sleeping* Torrance: *in a tree nearby collecting eggs from a birds nest*
DAMN! I'm not calling you by the wrong name right? 0.0
Lol thanks Dante
Ponyo: *slowly gets up my feet cold I walk into the middle of the fire and I sit down* hmm.
Chapter-4 I must say, it was never a sunny day at my house. My parents always were yelling at each other, screaming,...
(didn't this die?)
J.J: *gets out of a really fancy car at the airport*
(you are at the main camp that everyone set up Ryan... Make a better profile like J.J's and I think raven will let you in ;) tip of advise dear,)...
Torrance: *struggles slightly then pushes him away* NO!
Wow. Really good. ^.^ maybe use more advanced vocab to liven things up, along with even MORE details
Torrance: *slowly pulls away from him* why? Why are you doing this, asking me these questions, what did I do to you? To deserve this!
Torrance: *bites lip but slowly gives a nod* it's hard to NOT hate someone that has done *gestures around me* this to you.
Torrance: *lifts up my neck showing where the chains had rubbed my flesh raw when I clawed and tried to pull it off*
Torrance: *stays still staring at him the whole time*
(lol never said that)
Torrance: *sits down* (I was about to say lol. I'm not in the rp. Sorry)
Kitsue: *smiles and gently kisses him back then pulls away* we should get some food
Torrance: a first aid kit. *scratches my nose smearing blood all over my face*