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Bump
Dina- -snickers- Why so interested darling? Don't you have better places to go than talk to someone like me. I'm a mere person.
Bump
Dina- -crosses legs- Why, just watching the view.
Dina- oh no. They seem to notice you bird. Hawk- -screeches softly- They seem to notice you, but don't you want the attention? Dina- No....
(The fight, with Zack and Sophie, I think.)
Hawk- Obviously the girl could outmatch the tyrant out there. Dina- You don't say? I say that either one could, with their cunning and finesse,...
Dina- -while watching the scene, opens her arm with reveals a hawk, showing her other views- -whispers- I know. Shhh.
Mostly everyone who writes just get bored at some point. But it's great that you can do a good story without effort, just by boredom. Update soon.
It seems good, but could you organize it? Like- Nick: Blah blah blah, etc. Nick: Someone: Just some advice
Dina- -makes her way to a huge rock where she watches the whole view, but smirks to herself-
I'm pretty much the secretive story writer/reader around here. So pretty much I know all the stories around. But still good job
Dina- -rolls eyes and takes shoes off, letting feet glide with the water-
Bump, it's very pretty
Dina- -sits down by the creek and sees the commotion- Don't intervene. -throws rocks on the water-
Dina- -walks around, looking around surroundings-
It was fine. every song is good.