Separate names with a comma.
The very first paragraph is filled with I/I've/words of that sort. I'm not sure if that was the effect you were going for, but just telling you so...
Meh. The wedding wars are an excuse to war I suppose. How's an online relationship much different from a good friendship, though? Adding in a bit...
Be careful that you don't use the same word/variation too often or too close together, like I or me.
Katie the pedophilia master.
Oh joy.
I've had both an Xbox 360 and PS3 for quite some time now. Been a PS user since PS1. I've been a devoted xbox 360 user, however I think I might...
EliWhat happened to you?
Welcome back. Feel free to stay awhile. Lol.
@OP, I've had the same thought for quite some time now....
I helped an old lady cross railroad tracks. Where's my award?
Hmmm...
Interesting idea, I'll be watching and waiting.
One Zolt cola on this award going to Mag for taking on the bullies!
Casper I do love that idea! Make sure you give me credit so I can have a chance at the award as well! There is one upside to this, although it...
This probably tops the list of useless things the devs have added whilst blowing off the suggestions of the players. Or should I say "good job!"...
Oh wow. At the beginning of this chapter I was a bit unsure of the approach you were taking to telling the story (like point of view), however the...
It's against my morals to ask for handouts, so in my case yes, yes it is wrong.
Hahaha, yeah. One of my earliest stories finished very quickly, and that sort of taught me to draw things out. Eventually you'll find a nice pace...
Mel, I love reading your reviews, even if I haven't read the story. You do the best job of any interviewer in pimd fan fiction by far, or at least...
That's horrible about the goose. Fillers are fine, as long as you keep them relevant to the story line/characters as a whole. I'll be waiting...