Separate names with a comma.
Spelling!! Spelling!! Spelling!! Spelling!! Spelling!! Spelling!! Spelling!! Spelling!! Spelling!! Spelling!! GRAMMAR!! GRAMMAR!! GRAMMAR!!...
Kaitlyn: um yeah sure. I need to change though.
Kaitlyn: sure but I can't stay long.
Kaitlyn: um hi.
Kaitlyn: no! You'll turn back as soon as you get the chance! Why should I trust you.
Kaitlyn: knocks on the door of the house.
Kaitlyn: groans. I've already tried to turn demons before and as soon as they get the chance thy turn back.
Kaitlyn: ok. Sorry I yelled. How can I help?
Kaitlyn: what do you want?!
Kaitlyn: sees the note and goes to the house curiously.
Kaitlyn: realizes that she forgot to lock up her shop. Runs back and locks the door.
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Kaitlyn: still crying as he walks away
Still you could get the names right. Aurther Pendragon.
Kaitlyn: doing flips in the store Elizabeth: eating some sour sweets in a buggy/cart/trolley (whatever you want to call it. )
This story is more of a list of things.
It's good but you do need to do your research. There are a lot I missed things here.
Kaitlyn: NEVER!!!!!!!!!!
Kaitlyn: sitting in her office at the police station swinging her feet happily. Still wearing that outfit
Make sure your sentences lead into each other. I feel like some of them are just randomly put in there.