Separate names with a comma.
So confused...
Akiko- What's your name? I'm Akiko.
Akiko- ;Waves to Kat with some uncertainty.; Hi...
I really like this, but at times I felt that the writing doesn't flow as smoothly as it could.
Akiko- ;Turns her attention to her phone, biting her lower lip a little in concentration.;
Akiko- ;A little overwhelmed, she sits down in a chair. She unwraps a candy bar.;
This is pretty good. But it's digress, not digrace. ^.^
Akiko- ;She walks in quietly.;
(oh, and I ship Larry Stylinson.)
(sorry for the huge image )
Name: Akiko Izumi Age: 19 Sexuality: Bisexual Appearance: [img] Hometown: Sapporo, Japan Personality: Shy and innocent. She is quiet and hates...
River- ;She clutches the handles of her bags, looking at het feet as she enters the school.;
You dont need to indent twice for new dialofue and you don't need to go down at all after the dialogue. example: "Don't be so sad about it!" said...
(rrr. that guy is a jerk.)
(Who made Jack king of Fanfic forums?...)
Power: She can alter other people's emotions to match her own.
Name: River Hannsen Appearing Age: 16 Real Age: 17 Appearance: [img] House: Makenji Personality: Very shy. She doesn't like to talk to people and...
(of course.)
Xander is in Razlae.
Oh yeah...