Separate names with a comma.
Peyton; of corse. What type of - looks around and lowers her voice - witch wouldn't know how to use magic?
( sorry I have missed loads) Alyssa; - walks around the street with her hands in her pocket -
Yeah!
Try and put it into paragraphs but apart from that it is really good!
Wrong forum.. Post on off topic as someone might help on there instead of here.
When are we going to start?
Peyton; n.. Y-yes. - frowns -
Peyton; - stands up straight - and your question is?
Love it
Peyton; - stares at Isabella - w-what are you?
This one is really good compared to your other story?? Apart from a few spelling mistakes. And make your updates a bit longer.
( what is prime?)
Peyton; - looks up and panic's even more - n-no-nothing.. I-it was already here when I got here.. I-I...
Ok, well I understand the dyslexia part but couldn't you turn spell check or something on? Just to sort of improve it?
Peyton; sugar!! - paces up and down trying to think of a spell desperately - come on brain!! Think!!
Lilith; - steps infront of Colin - leave her alone now. Just leave it. My parents were killed too.. But I'm not still hunting for that one person...
Lilith; I don't get you.
Peyton; - rips cloak off and chucks it on the fire - why did you do that stupid!? - stares at the fire as it burns through the cloak and starts...
Lilith; - sighs - so why did you have to get changed into a vamp?
Peyton; - tries to think of a spell to put it out -