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Kaira: I grumbled a little, waking up slowly. I'm thankful for being able to wake up. I felt the fresh bandages and was feeling a bit stronger....
No problem ^w^ I wonder how this story will turn out
Kaira: "Take care of yourself too okay? We all need each other." I coughed and put a hand to my chest. My heart still beating fast and my coin...
Kaira: My voice sounded weak, "Please, just tell me if you're hurt." I squinted more. Unless I'm in a certain situation, I can't handle pain too...
Kaira: Who was that? Ark? I felt hands on me. "A-Ark?" I slumped back and closed my eyes. Squinting in pain. "Are you okay? I don't know what...
Kaira: I sat upright really quickly. Gasping for breath, the vision coming back into my eyes. I don't know if I let out a scream, but I probably...
So beautiful. ;w; I'm hafta reread and create a better comment when it's not so early in the morning ;-;
:0 continue please! I shall proceed to make a full comment later when it's not 4:10 am .w.
BAM SAM!! And yes I partially learned the bbc coding accepted in the forums. Or i just mostly tried what i know from other forums :3
Kaira's body twitches a little. Some blood seeped through one of the bandages.
Well it's good so far but delve us more into the story, by that I mean update xD And if it's in journal style it doesn't hurt to fake date it...
(Idk what to add, so until Kaira is pronounced dead or gets medical help, then Ima get a midnight snack and enjoy the plot.)
That's my Ash! ^w^ Then again I am the consultant since the beginning >:3
Kaira's body fell through the tree tops getting even more scratches. It cushioned the fall but her body lays there on the forest floor, bleeding.
Kaira: 'Now's my chance!!' I quickly pulled myself onto its shoulder and took in a deep breath. I kept digging into it's skin. I crawled into...
Kaira: "AGH!" I felt my back hurting worse with all the rocks buried in the sand. I think I was bleeding, I'm not sure. I'm feeling light and I'm...
Kaira: I tried not to open my mouth. A little river water got in as I dug my fingers in more. I kept climbing. The way it's splashing may make...
Kaira: 'Crap crap crap crap crap!' Was all I could think as I held my breath before impact. I kept climbing though. Trying not to use the air...
(The minotaurs back hand can reach its back? O.o)
(Damn the phone dies one time) Kaira: "RARGH!" I made a made dash at the minotaur. I started by climbing up its leg. Going in a zig zag motion,...