Separate names with a comma.
Nice job I like it
One by one they exited the bunk room. Satar naturally lead and Tal naturally stuck close to Luke. Soon they were off the boat, the sun shone...
Nikki gave a slight pout at Satars comment. Suddenly the ship shook, and jack yelled from outside the bunk room, "WE ARE AT THE PORT!" There...
I know right Jodie!! Sahwweeeeeet
fuck yeah I'm a leader
Jack knocked on the door and Luke opened it, "just a heads up, we are nearing the port. He gave a odd, confused look at nikki before exiting."...
Not yet Qin! I didn't introduce many people yet to be honest. Soon though.
You were drugged the night before by a abusive man. Your gonna have memory lapse :p
The dawns light broke through the porthole. Satar was the first up.." Holy fuck conners gone turn into a women!" Lictoral shot up, "what?"...
Lol niiice
Lmao
Haha I like how he made me a flirt XD
He is an oddball
It isn't me. It's JJJ
Great! Just work in separating the dialogue a little bit for a smoother read
He also has an irrational fear of spray painted blue chipmunks
Name: John Johnny Johnson Tall skinny and dark hairs. With peircing black eyes. He hates you. He hates them. He hates everyone and everything. I...
Good
LOINS HE SAYS XD