Separate names with a comma.
I WANT AN UPDATE!
Read in-between the lines.... And seriously, romance is so overdone! But...as appeasement to my readers, I will add a minimal amount.
I breathed in slowly as the warm water hit my face coming down like a subtle rain out of heaven. Feeling the warm water through my black hair felt...
I hate when that happens...
Name: Adam Role: Police Officer Personality: Tough, sarcastic, not mean per se, but does not mess around, and gets to the bottom of things...
When have you ever seen writing without spacing after punctuation?
This stories chain of events makes little sense... :/
Please, please! Tell me this isn't another high school romance story...
Less romance, more killing please! Ha
More detail on surrounding preferably. Also more detail on actions... Longer updates as well. Also, put paragraphs with a space in-between. And...
Should I continue? :/
UPDATE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
:D It's great.
So, we can't give any criticism?
COME ON!!!
I ain't cwazy *****, you cwazy!!! Jk jk haha
No problem.
Remove the asterisk. See.
Bump
Terrible!