Separate names with a comma.
(Sam, don't be harsh...)
(Dude no. D: Overdosing is never the answer. =\ )
I said that she should read a book to compare it to something, before I knew she was dyslexic. .-. And I was mainly saying that, because it lacks...
Stop now please. Read a book and then read this. There is so many mistakes I can't even bother to list. So poorly written. /).<
Bandit: -Laughs- C'mon, I'll show you it. Uh, hopefully it'll open though.
No. Just no. .-.
(Switching I pods. :3 Battery died.) Jess: -Murmurs a spell under her breath- Bandit: -Walk quickly towards the direction where the fire was/ had...
(Hi. :L This is my other account.) Bandit: -Thinks for a minute then gets an idea- The room of requirement?
Alex: -Walks to a hotel-
Jess: -Sells her bow to a man in a dark hood-
Jess: -Jumps down and walks towards the market-
Jess: -Crafts a bow out of the wood-
(Thanks) Jess: -Sits on a tree branch-
(Can I join back again please?)
Dancer the not so shabby wombat xD
Jess: Yep, pretty much
Also use paragraphs and check your grammar. Other thenthat it's pretty good.
I like it, it's interesting. Just add more detail and don't rush it.
Jess: Sorry,I think I picked it up off an annoying Maths teacher -Laughs quietly-
Jess: Really? -Says sarcastically, and rolls her eyes still smiling slightly-