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Oh. .-. My apologies, then.
Don't start that shit. This is a love thread, not a damn boxing ring. Warrior! Damn man.
Chocolate. Period.
Daaaaaaaaaan. Forums will miss you.
I'm not going to update this, Hun. Lol. Thanks. You all have quite lovely suggestions. >.>
Thanks.
Thanks. I think.
Detail and feelings. Check. And you're fine. Lol. I appreciate it. I did ask for it.
And I was also wondering about the ending. Should I leave it as is or change it?
Fin. So stronger vocab and make only the little girl get tired?
I know. Then, and only then, did I climb into the tub with my little girl. Ignoring the water and suds saturating my clothing , I grabbed and...
I heard sharp cracks coming from her ad my blood began to boil. I pulled my way up, away from the wall, his kicks echoing in my ears. He touched...
That's why it made me sick. He turned to her. I knew his gaze was full of fire, his stance threatening. He wouldn't hurt her, I hoped, as he...
"You will not," he remarked quietly, his voice gaining strength as he continued, "ever wear such revealing clothing again!" His statement ended on...
Oh. Okay. Lol. I'll proof it again. Taevon suddenly shifted away from the doorframe and made his way towards us. I jumped, startled, as he...
"Come on, Zay!" Taevon yelled at me from atop the step, the door swinging open. His voice was hard, and he no longer bore the genial smile that...
They're just long paragraphs. Lol. And it's a short story. It'll get there. Promise. We reached home. I parked the car in the driveway. The...
I wrote this on a laptop. Lol. They are paragraphs.