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Red: *closes her eyes slowly* 'I wanted someone else to drink that...' Eldriel: -starts walking away- I'm sorry, I called you Fang.
Red: *smiles* 'Somebody who excepts my gift' *motions towards her necklace, which contained a veil of her blood* Eldriel: You're their leader...
Red: *Whispers* Anyone...As long as they drink...my blood... Eldriel: No what I mean is you can't.
(Gaah posting simultaneously) Eldriel: -smiles, handing Ark back his jacket- Thank you, -walks away-
Red: *moves her finger spelling out one word from her blood* -Love- 'It's dumb, but nessecary for my survival..' *coughs*
(I don't think Red and Dolph are in the same place as you guys)
Red: 'Damn it, just who is this guy' *coughs blood*
Eldriel: Far away from here..
Red: *tries nodding* 'That guy...got on my nerves' Eldriel: I'm sorry -shoves off Arks hand-
Eldriel: I...sorry...I meant to...I'll be leaving now... -walks away-
Eldriel: -walks away, quietly-
Eldriel: Let's go Wolfe, -pets Wolfe- wouldn't you like to leave? Leave everything behind? -throws down her earpiece, crushing it underneath...
Eldriel: -hops off Wolfe ready to walk in the plaza when she hears a female voice-
Eldriel: -faintly over hears the conversation, before responding- It's Eldriel I've got his location...-static comes through-
Bump
I love it, a few errors here and there grammatically speaking, but the plot is really interesting I can't wait for more, bump!
Red: *winces*
(' ' thoughts) Red: *looks up at Dolph* 'Who..is this? I just want to sleep...for a while' *tries closing her eyes*
(Just make sure weaknesses are shown more often, so you don't seem over powered) Red: *opens her eyes slowly* Hmm
Great update, bump~