Separate names with a comma.
Good, but spread the paragraphs, check the spelling and every time someone new talks you have to start a new paragraph.
I like... But this neeeeeeeeds to be longer and spread the paragraphs
Prologue -FLASH BACK- "Marina! Marina!" A gruffly voice called out. "Wait a sec, gramps!" After a few seconds, a brunette appeared, breathing...
~Amanda's pov~ I looked at the engraved mark of our names on the tree. "Well, at least they're happy." It's not that I still love him. I mean,...
Not to you, but it makes perfect sense to me. Anyway, sorry if y'all think I'm coming of harsh
Not only into your arms, I also fell in love, but when I found out... it was already too late. Somehow, when I saw your eyes—the anguished soul...
Great haha Just fix a couple of the errors but overall great job
Advise* I mean't the verb, not the noun
You were a killer, always running of to murder someone. I... I was just a girl who had been heartbroken. Because of you. My future disappeared...
No thanks,, I'd prefer to listen to what I want, but thanks for the advise
you made my day
I do
Rise of the fox, clearly I know how to read, since I'm replying to you
His arms wound their way around her shaking form and just held on to her. Just held her and never thinking about the future or the past but rather...
you can't, the comp is over lol
Oh... Okay that's makes sense Thanks, and keep up the good work
It was another two years later, when she saw a child named Patrick killed in front of her, trying to protect another spy nicknamed Arial, that she...
BUMP
Oh my gawd I remember you This is really goooooood I just would like to know the pace of this ? Is it fast? Intermediate? Steady?...
Nope, I didn't ehehe sorry