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-I look up at him. I put some pressure onto my arm. My fingers twitched as the wound hurts like hell.- "I knew that...i have to get the stitches...
-I yelp- "Ow! What are you doing! You shouldn't stitch it yet. I haven't got the venom out. Go away. I'll do it myself" -I jerk my arm away and...
-I started to feel weak in every part of my body and i lift my arm, to see blood gushing out from where the lizard bit me-
-I look at him in disbelief and struggle to sit up- "Its not like i wanted to be. It jumped out of nowhere!" -I scoffed as i watch him leave and...
-I fall in the process and gasp as the beast dropped dead to the ground. I panted heavily as sweat trickled down my neck-
(Scratch that ) -I sprint away as fast as i can, trying to save myself from this giant lizard beast- "Ahhhh!"
- I walk towards the lake and bump into Myles- "Sorry!"
-I look around as i stepped on the other side. I take an arrow and positioned it on my bow,prepared to shoot if theres any danger.- "Doesn't seem...
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-I step on it. Relieved that it didn't break. One by one, i walk across-
(Been awhile since i came thats far) -I walk towards the kingdom's boundary. Eyeing the other side of the bridge. I hold on to my bow,tightly.-...
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-I stay in the house for today, baking and cooking.-
-I notice Sam and smile at her. I leisurely walk around, looking for rare herbs that i can find-
-I bring my bow and arrows with me as i take a stroll through the forest-
This is really good Honestly, i thought the narrator was a girl at first but i eventually found out it was a guy But overall, Its great for...
-I stop shooting, pleased that i didn't miss any of my targets. I walk over and one by one, retrieved the arrows-
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-I practice shooting arrows at on open field, using hay as targets-
-I walk towards the market with only a basket-