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Jack the ripper interesting
That night Tristan laid in bed thinking about the day earlier. He was so happy for the first time in years he didn't feel the emptiness. He decide...
Tristan plays with the children Shelby and Kat run around stoping people from getting hurt when the door explodes three people with guns run in...
Tristan walks out the room smiling he was surprised by her answer at first but he was very happy now Kat looks out her door and she looks at...
Ali's thought process seams a little simplistic
I like it Linda
Shelby came down stairs her wings not to big to conceal she was scared but the other children accepted her and played with her they were to young...
After the dance Ali was more scared of Tristan but not because of the emptiness but because of the spark she saw in his eyes what was it what did...
Ali wakes up the next morning looks around the room "were am oh right I toke the job so I can get close the imortal and do my job" Kat walks in...
Shelby awakes she's I'm her room her wings wide for the world to see she looked around Kat sat next to her bed Tristan and the strange lady who...
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Well ya but your evil
Bob leads Shelby down an Ally he stops throws her against a wall and starts unbuckling his belt Shelby instantly knows what's happening she starts...
Tristan wakes up Kat is siting on him legs on both sides of him patting a wet wash cloth on his head."Kat get off please" "thank god you awake we...
Did I ever say she's an angel
"The children have gone to bed thank god" Kat walks in "hey I'll finish cleaning Tristan I think Shelby is crying" Tristan walks over to the...