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James: After walking for what seemed like hours he's finally standing in front of the lab. He shift his body back to normal from granite form and...
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James: He keeps walking until there's not any more forest, just a big clearing and at the end the lab. He shift his body into granite and then...
Mine
Dr. Owen Hofmann**
Name: Dr. Hoffman Age: 48 Bio: has worked at the lab for over twenty years, his experiments mainly on James, since it was his discovery. He...
James: He stops by a small water spring and he kneels next to it, drinking some and washing his face. They hadn't been able to shower yet and...
James: He remembers how Raven and Emilie had said they were only about two mikes away from the lab. He starts walking faster, hoping to get there...
James: He smiles "you're right, I'm of no use in this group. I'm out of here" he picks up his stuff "and it would surprise you how reading made...
James: He barks a laugh and shoves Tristan "fuck off" his body starts heating up as his anger rises until small flames are surrounding him "you...
James: "We have to go now. Two people have already been captured! Do you just pretend to stay here until all of us are back in cages?" He points...
The monkey is mine
James: He watches them disappear and growls punching a nearby tree, making it shatter from his diamond form. He turns back normal and speed walks...
James: He slows down when he sees Raven captured by shadow- "Raven!" He yells. He then closes his fists as his diamond body fills with diamond...
James: He hears someone falling down and starts sprinting that way "who's there?" He yells as he runs.
James: He enters the forest "I'm sure the noise came from here" he drops the apple and stays still, looking around him.
James: He swallows the piece of apple and stays still listening carefully. "What was that" he mutters to himself. He hears the wind blow but...
James: He picks out one chocolate bar and an apple. He eats the chocolate bar is a matter of seconds before wiping the apple with host shirt and...
You keep changing from Third to first person narrator... Don't do that. Also you should check your grammar and spelling... And the story sounds...
James: He shoves his hands in his pockets and walks over to one of the carts to grab something to eat.