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(Angies not married yet... She's engaged...) Kris: Good night, Lauryn, sparring was fun today. *Yawns* Lauryn: *Smiles* Yes, I had fun as well....
Kris: *Goes where he's alone and transforms himself and his guitar case into a dove and a stick, then flies away* (Gotta go you guys, good night!)
Kris: *Finshes playing, earning $89 and 50 cents*
Cloud: Hm? My trip? It was uneventful, there was little to distract me, allowing me to think about what I had gone to think about. In short, my...
(Well then make sure nobody else gets cut on your roses )
Cloud: *Helps himself and eats much slower as he watches the bunny-eared girl down the entire plate of food*
Krys: *Smiles sheepishly, ears twitching, face turning a little red* Thank you very much... *Grabs the silverware and begins eating, finishing...
(Wow, dude... Careful that you don't cut yourself on them )
(Also, Krys is waiting for an answer )
(Well let's make the most outta this... My eyelids are getting very heavy... )
I have no doubt.
(Re-bump...)
(Search for the video on youtube, it's very cool)
(Awesome, but I hafta go to bed soon...) Kris: *Plays "Passionflower" like Jon Gomm, and a large crowd gathers around him cheering him on*
Of course, the actual story is BRILLIANT! So please make more
OMG!!! I feel HORRIBLE about MacKenzie...
A bit over-the-top on dialouge... You should have some descriptions of their surroundings, and a bit more detail into how they speak and move....
(Hello? Am I allowed to join?)
(Lol)
(Erm, sorry I'm a bit late, but; Kris Booker Black Hair, brown eyes Able to use magic, both for turning himself and others into stuff and casting...